This week this is my literacy. We had to write paragraphs about camp. I think this is a fun activity. It was easy for me. Next time I want to add some more details using the 5W's and an H. The best part was my first paragraph and here it is.
Kia Ora Charlotte J, Ko Harmony toku ingoa Ka Pai to mahi Kotiro, I can see your potential in your blog post, I really liked how you pronounced Aquatic Centre right, I think next time you can make your experience a little but longer, like probably 200 to 250 words long. Thank you Kotiro. Kakite for now. Hopefully next time I hope on your blog I see more post from 2017. Ka Pai to mahi Charlotte J.
Hi Charlotte, I like how you are beginning to include detail in your paragraph by describing where the pool complex was and you are thinking about giving examples to support your ideas. Next time you could also include what you did at the pool to make it more interesting for the reader.
Kia Ora Charlotte It's Ayesha here from M2 (your class). I like how you have explained what you liked the most. Maybe next time you could write a bit more about what you did on camp. How long did it take for you to write this and why exactly did you like the swimming pool the most?
Kia Ora Charlotte J, Ko Harmony toku ingoa Ka Pai to mahi Kotiro, I can see your potential in your blog post, I really liked how you pronounced Aquatic Centre right, I think next time you can make your experience a little but longer, like probably 200 to 250 words long. Thank you Kotiro. Kakite for now. Hopefully next time I hope on your blog I see more post from 2017. Ka Pai to mahi Charlotte J.
ReplyDeletethx harmony ill remember that
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Hi Charlotte, I like how you are beginning to include detail in your paragraph by describing where the pool complex was and you are thinking about giving examples to support your ideas. Next time you could also include what you did at the pool to make it more interesting for the reader.
ReplyDeletethx ill remember that
DeleteKia Ora Charlotte It's Ayesha here from M2 (your class). I like how you have explained what you liked the most. Maybe next time you could write a bit more about what you did on camp. How long did it take for you to write this and why exactly did you like the swimming pool the most?
ReplyDeletei ayesha because it was the most fun part of the camp
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