My goal was to was to use FANBOYS in the middle of my sentences. Can you see where I have used the FANBOYS In my writing.
Here are 2 sentences about it:
Mrs Prendergast has Browny greyish hair. It is soft and curly with some straight parts in her hair.Mrs Prendergast has an oval face with Pale Brown skin and just a few wrinkles.
Hi Charlotte, I really enjoyed reading your description of me and especially like how you have said my face only has a few wrinkles. It is great to see you extending your sentences and starting to use FANBOYS. Try and vary the words you use to extend your sentence each time to add interest to your writing. Tino pai, Mrs P.
ReplyDeleteHi Charlotte this is Miriam from Wainui Beach School in Gisborne.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your your descriptive writing it painted a picture in my head of what your teacher Mrs Prendergast looks like. She must be very pretty. I also liked that you added lots of detail to your writing.
I can't wait to read your next blog post.
From Miriam